The Thelien Attack
I aboslutely loved this campaign and strongly support the idea of adding it to mainline! In my opinion of much higher quality than a lot of current mainline quality. I've written feedback on possible improvements by scenario below. I have commented on sections that do not follow the typography style guide. I don't believe this should be important for add-ons, but since this has a chance of getting into mainline I commented on it, since all mainline content needs to follow the style guide (https://wiki.wesnoth.org/Typography_Style_Guide). I have a few general comments not applicable to the specific scenarios first. The swamp image used for the story text could be used a background in the campaign menu in my opinion. Also, I personally think this should probably have three difficulties like most other campaigns. I don't see a reason for two. Anyways, here's my review:
Scenario 1
- The map could use some reefs, mud or kelp forests to make it a little more interesting. The elvish villages seem a bit weird. Maybe some merfolk ones would make more sense and still make sure there is some variety? For the castle tiles (not the allied keep) to the south of the map, maybe aquatic or troll encampments could fit in with the saurians a bit better.
- I think using rain from TSG/TDG would be pretty cool for this scenario.
- (Typography) Shek'kahan needs a curly apostrophe: Shek’kahan
- (Typography) 'home' needs curly apostrophes: ‘home’
Scenario 2
- Again, for the single castles tile in the far south of the map I think troll/aquatic encamptment fits best. I'd personally choose aquatic here and troll in the last one.
- (Typography) 'wildlands' needs curly apostrophes: ‘wildlands’
Scenario 3
- A swamp story image is still used. Maybe a desert image would fit better? viewtopic.php?p=442536#p442536 has a geat sandy desert image, though it may be a bit too barren.
- Sea Serpents are found in seas according to their unit description. I'm not sure a small lake in the desert makes much sense for them.
- Sand Scamperers might fit better here than regular Giant Scorplings.
- (Typography) 'Landar' needs curly apostrophes: ‘Landar’
Scenario 4
- As in the last scenario, a swamp story image is still used. Maybe the AOI story image could fit here?
- (Typography) shan't needs curly apostrophe: shan’t
Scenario 5
- Same story image comment as in the last scenario.
- The story text refers to the Far North, but I doubt saurians in the Far North would refer to their own lands as the Far North, a term whose reference point much further south in Wesnoth.
- The elves say they can see orcs before they appear.
- (Typography) Orcish assassins should be fully capitalzed like all unit names: Orcish Assassins
Scenario 6
- Like in the first scenario, some kelp forests, reefs or mud could make the large swaths of swamp a little more interesting.
Scenario 7
- Same Far North comment as in Scenario 5.
I aboslutely loved this campaign and strongly support the idea of adding it to mainline! In my opinion of much higher quality than a lot of current mainline quality. I've written feedback on possible improvements by scenario below. I have commented on sections that do not follow the typography style guide. I don't believe this should be important for add-ons, but since this has a chance of getting into mainline I commented on it, since all mainline content needs to follow the style guide (https://wiki.wesnoth.org/Typography_Style_Guide). I have a few general comments not applicable to the specific scenarios first. The swamp image used for the story text could be used a background in the campaign menu in my opinion. Also, I personally think this should probably have three difficulties like most other campaigns. I don't see a reason for two. Anyways, here's my review:
Scenario 1
- The map could use some reefs, mud or kelp forests to make it a little more interesting. The elvish villages seem a bit weird. Maybe some merfolk ones would make more sense and still make sure there is some variety? For the castle tiles (not the allied keep) to the south of the map, maybe aquatic or troll encampments could fit in with the saurians a bit better.
- I think using rain from TSG/TDG would be pretty cool for this scenario.
- (Typography) Shek'kahan needs a curly apostrophe: Shek’kahan
- (Typography) 'home' needs curly apostrophes: ‘home’
Scenario 2
- Again, for the single castles tile in the far south of the map I think troll/aquatic encamptment fits best. I'd personally choose aquatic here and troll in the last one.
- (Typography) 'wildlands' needs curly apostrophes: ‘wildlands’
Scenario 3
- A swamp story image is still used. Maybe a desert image would fit better? viewtopic.php?p=442536#p442536 has a geat sandy desert image, though it may be a bit too barren.
- Sea Serpents are found in seas according to their unit description. I'm not sure a small lake in the desert makes much sense for them.
- Sand Scamperers might fit better here than regular Giant Scorplings.
- (Typography) 'Landar' needs curly apostrophes: ‘Landar’
Scenario 4
- As in the last scenario, a swamp story image is still used. Maybe the AOI story image could fit here?
- (Typography) shan't needs curly apostrophe: shan’t
Scenario 5
- Same story image comment as in the last scenario.
- The story text refers to the Far North, but I doubt saurians in the Far North would refer to their own lands as the Far North, a term whose reference point much further south in Wesnoth.
- The elves say they can see orcs before they appear.
- (Typography) Orcish assassins should be fully capitalzed like all unit names: Orcish Assassins
Scenario 6
- Like in the first scenario, some kelp forests, reefs or mud could make the large swaths of swamp a little more interesting.
Scenario 7
- Same Far North comment as in Scenario 5.
Statistics: Posted by Gothyoba — Yesterday, 8:18 pm